Angel of Death

Hey Kylan, This installment was better than the first. There was more action, more emotion, and more depth. Sure a man who has a split personality or possibly suffers from ...

I've read all three but Extras, it's not as good as the other three.

I just want to say thanks to the people who have commented. Can someone else please give some advice? Thanks, Angel

Can someone else critique this please?

Light_Devil: You actually loved this? Really? Thanks! Well yeah the Angels names just happen to be Adam and Eve, yeah and I know that Adam and Eve were the first ...

Thanks for critiquing this clograbby. I know this is a little hard to follow but it'll be fixed up. This just started out as jumbled ideas but after rereading it ...

real smoothe Jig :lol:

mikedb1492: Thanks for finding those mistakes because I don't think I would have found them. You really think it flows well? Why thank you, I was thinking that it was ...

mikedb1492: Thanks for finding those mistakes because I don't think I would have found them. You really think it flows well? Why thank you, I was thinking that it was ...

Thanks Sam, I totally get what you mean but I'm glad that you liked it.

I finished chapter 1 and I loved it. You are an amazing writer, and if I said this before then I'm not sorry, because its soo true. Nicandro! I love ...

I really think was a good conclusion to the story. It was definitely unexpected and brilliant beyond words but if you ever decide to add another part PM me, :D ...

Uh scasha the MC of this part is Col and he is a boy. Col is David's brother and the first part goes into the future where Col is with ...

Thanks scasha, yeah I was feeling that it was a little rushed myself so right now I'm outlining the scene before I can add more more details. And yes they ...

I don't know if I'll write more, it was kind of a thing that I had to get out of mind but I'll think about it. Thanks :D :D